Redemption

Good luck with that >.>

Good luck with that >.>

Then I would like to hear (or in this case, read) what excellency is ,authored by you, if it is such mediocrity. Give me an example what a great poem is, from your own pen and paper, if you believe you can do better, so I can step my game up.

Or...

You can provide constructive criticism since I welcome it with open arms so I can improve as a writer.

Then I would like to hear (or in this case, read) what excellency is ,authored by you, if it is such mediocrity. Give me an example what a great poem is, from your own pen and paper, if you believe you can do better, so I can step my game up.

Or...

You can provide constructive criticism since I welcome it with open arms so I can improve as a writer.

Relax dude, I was only kidding.

I like how your rhyme scheme is "whenever I feel like it".

Why bother rhyming if you're going to be lazy and inconsistent about it.

Relax dude, I was only kidding.

I'm sorry

I like how your rhyme scheme is "whenever I feel like it".

Why bother rhyming if you're going to be lazy and inconsistent about it.

What? I thought that poetry doesn't have to rhyme all the time, but I'll try harder in creating a constructive rhyme scheme. Thanks for the input.

Yeah, it would be better with a more decisive "flow" to it. Your rhymes are kind of scattered.

Yeah, it would be better with a more decisive "flow" to it. Your rhymes are kind of scattered.

I agree, but this is a poem, I was not aiming for it to be a rap, but the ones coming next are going to be.

Yeah, I can see the poem bit, but the rhyme scheme still needs to be a bit structured if it's gonna be there at all.