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Captain Marin

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Hello all, and welcome to this little blog in which is a very personal one, but I trust none of my cousins, brothers, parent, uncles, aunts, friends, nor anyone connected to me regarding real life will not encounter. This blog is mainly a blog where I release my anger/emotions out by displaying lyrics (mainly rap) and recieving feedback from others to see if the !@#$ I write is great. I know you guys expect rap to be a genre filled with such foolishness and stupidness with the use of slanguage in a rhyming patttern, but Im here to tell you that is not how I roll.

My rap lyrics are lyrical and uses poetic devices to be as great as it is. It is very literate, comprehensive, and if there are times when the lyrics become even more awesome if I rap it aloud. Im going to begin by displaying each set of lyrics as one song, not recorded nor spoken aloud. After I gained all the feedback from you guys and most of the public approves the lyrics (including myself), then Im going to start releasing instrumentals and do the same with that.

When that is all said and done, I will either get a high-quality mic, or once I hit 16 years of age (in which I turn this August :D ), get a job to record in a studio, then Im going to start presenting you guys the full track and release a mixtape online.

The lyrics and the rap-alouds are influenced by Eminem, Macklemore, Crooked I, 2Pac, and Royce da 5'9 (mainly Eminem) . Each theme of the song will get a different tone of rap voice I use. So when Im talking about how life is a !@#$%* or dissing against another, then I might use Eminem's aggressive tone, if I talk about love !@#$, misery, calm crap ,etc, then the tone is more influenced by Macklemore, if Im just talking about how bad-ass I am, the tone will most likely be influenced by Royce 5'9, 2Pac, Eminem (in "Renegade and Dead Wrong" or Crooked I.

Now that Im done here, here's some samples of my tracks:

Some Political Rhymes:

Until my dying day will be the last when I lose grip on the truth/

Look at every politician damn straight in the eye

They wave a hand full of !@#$%^&*

But I stomp my hand against this table demanding proof/

They foolishly believe my soul is made of mud and hay

So they huff and puff

And release a hateful woof/

But no one is taking out !@#$

Because my soul is made out of bricks

How dare they strip justice from the people

And confescate families their needs of a roof/

Making an excuse/

That it was a batch of senseless terrorists that killed all those innocent lives

Yet they were too busy counting their money to prevent this/

But I know it was an inside job for the sake of national carrying capacity and inserting fear to the people so that they can have terrorism as an excuse to strip our rightsSo they blamed Osama bin Laden and henced this/

Cruel tyranny

The `true corrupt,

Congressmen of America, I know what you all are truly/

Yall are !@#$%*^/

Mother Earth's bully/

Telling America is all fine

Yet yall dont have the balls to tell the truth

So yall become stressed and your soul evaporates to a feeling all mushy/

Obama promised us stability, prosperity, yet he lets all the evil inside America bypass/

These politicians says they know how the poor feels

Yet they know nothing about the struggle, the trouble of middle class/

Congress better bow to their knees and apologize to all those souls they failed to save/

Telling us how these foreign leaders are awful

Yet they dont have the nerve to admit they're just as bad as Saddam Husain/

Everyone pictures Obama s America's savior,

America's great who will revive the American grace/

Barrack insults Bush yet he's the same as him

And national economic stats show even worse than Bush's 8-year presidential race/

So he sells his soul to Satan, adopts the practices of illuminati just in case/

He is white power disguising his true self,

his true hell,

Through a black face/

Some Beef Flingers:

I am different from all these whack-ass

Ballsacks

Calling themselves different

When they hence sex, drugs, and snapbacks

like 2Chainz/

Lil Wayne is the Hip-Hop Game's Saddam Hussain/

Stripping his own brothers and sisters' talent

So in comparison

Weezy looks insane/

Then I come along and the truth hits right in his face/

He's a disgrace/

Who calls himself the fast-paced leader

The next Ether

In this race/

he thinks he's first when Im way ahead of these chumps

As Weezy sits helplessly in last place/

Embrace/

The true rebel

The next level

Never trembled

Avenger assembled

Rapping grace/

As I hold a head engraved through a stick

The boy looks like a piece of !@#$

A texting !@#$%*

A cowardly snitch

Oh wait, all those words exactly describe Drake/

G double O D should (G.O.O.D) change their label name to W.H.A.C.K music/

Oh, Im sorry

I forgot their all too stupid to spell/

Selling their soul to the devil

Inheriting a rich life in Earth

But what good is it

When your eternal afterlife is going to be spent through the cages of hell/

And it pisses me off how some describe me as a hater and describe this track as a diss/

This is truth in motion

Take out the F in Wocka Flocka Flame

And thats what that Whack MC truly is/

You try to view your life and career as a movie

Like you're B Rabbit rollin and strollin throughout 8 Mile/

Hell, how do you hope to become the best rapper ever

how do you expect the people to exclaim "Hopsin goes harder than Eminem"

When you're copying his same style/

Some Deep !@#$:

I lay defeated

Blanketed upon the seas of the shadow/

A dark tide and dark waters

A tide so dark, yet so shallow/

I know Im about to meet my doom

So why bother combatting this phantom

Why am I unleashing such a furious tackle/

I bow to my knees and plead the heavens above for mercy/

This world is survival of the fittest, damn it

And God cursed me to not be the fittest

Am I not worthy?!/

Should I worry of this journey,

Suicidal thoughts multiplying uncontrollably

As if my soul has been anexed by a cerebral virus or bacteria

Recognized as a menace worldly/

Thinking so absurdly/

Love

I curse that I have met you,

Since love strikes me blind/

Ever since then, the days grew longer

the nights grew colder

Without your sight/

To impress you and make you love me

Is what I try/

Blindfolded to the fact that my awkwardness

And treacherous looks

Cant be paired with a girl so divine/

A girl so fine

that she makes the angels fly/

A girl so fly

That she soars higher than an eagle

Would soar, sky high/

And me being a bad-ass

As I yield/

the pen I posses in which perpetrates and persists

As my sword and shield/

I abide into this battlefield/

And knife the adversary regardless his cry of mercy

As he kneels and squeals/

This is war

Whereas booms and smashes are to be taken as a bird's chirp or a smurf/

It is to be taken lightly and expectly

Despite the

Enemy attempting to accomplish against us

Slashes and clashes of hurt/

Our weapons are words/

And if we dare to combat with violence

Against a hip-hop fanatic riot

Then thou shall be hunted by a million's curse/

My veins are made of ice

My bones are substituted by rifles and knives/

Dare to push me down

then get ready to shed a river filled with tears and cry and cry and cry/

Until you die,

with nothing but that exact flying $%&@/

Once perished I shall fry your flesh

Devour it ,saber the flavor

And wash it all down with a good cup of your own blood/

What up!/

So that's about it. I doubt 75 percent of you who have started reading this are still reading it by now, so Imma leave with a have a great day/night.

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What's wrong with G.O.O.D.? Kanye brought Common's career back, and introduced the world to John Legend and Mr. Hudson.

Kanye is the creator and founder of G.O.O.D Music. He is the reason why the Watch the Throne Album was garbage, the Cruel Summer album was crap (note: it featured all signees of G.O.O.D Music), 2Chainz is crap, Big Sean is crap, Yeezy is crap. John Legend is a meh singer, but there is nothing special with his voice nor it astounds me. I like Pusha T's flow, but his lyrics are just as weak as YMCMB and Taylor Gang's. But I agree with you on the part about Common and Mr. Hudson, though.

I knew 2Pac wasn't dead

As much as I am overwhelmed by this comment and how much it has made my day, I cannot compare myself to Makaveli since no one can set the bar as high as Pac and Eminem has.

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Kanye is the creator and founder of G.O.O.D Music. He is the reason why the Watch the Throne Album was garbage, the Cruel Summer album was crap (note: it featured all signees of G.O.O.D Music), 2Chainz is crap, Big Sean is crap, Yeezy is crap. John Legend is a meh singer, but there is nothing special with his voice nor it astounds me. I like Pusha T's flow, but his lyrics are just as weak as YMCMB and Taylor Gang's. But I agree with you on the part about Common and Mr. Hudson, though.

Watch the Throne was good for what it was: a braggadacio album. Even then, the production on it was pretty amazing (ie The Joy). And you're ignoring the fact that just before WTT, Kanye put out possibly the best rap album since Jay Z started running New York. As far as Cruel Summer, group collaborations usually tend to fall short due to the range the group spans. It was good at giving CyHi the Prynce mainstream exposure, and "Sin City" even had Malik on it, giving him his first exposure to a really wide audience since "Would You Like to Ride?". Hit-Boy also had amazing co-production on "Higher". I don't see how you can call Pusha T's lyrics weak given he laid down a triple or quadruple entendre in "New God Flow". Overall, I'd say you aren't paying too much attention to the music and probably don't like Kanye, because your analysis is pretty off. You can say you don't like the artists, but you gave the wrong reasons. Also, 2 Chainz isn't signed, since now with digital sales you can get by without a deal.
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Nas is the greatest of all time. Lock post, end of discussion.

CyHi "Whoopty Doo" >>>> Nas' "Stay"

It's bad to touch a beat after another artist and give an underwhelming (comparitively) performance. And no, I'm not saying CyHi is better. Just that it's kind of like Jay Z hopping on Renegade when Eminem and Royce both had way better verses.

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Listen to Illmatic and then re-write this.

If we judge artists' careers by single albums, we could go ahead and prematurely call Ab-Soul the greatest based off mixtapes. Also, Illmatic spawned the "have multiple producers on one album" trend, which makes everything sound sporadic and barely put together.
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If we judge artists' careers by single albums, we could go ahead and prematurely call Ab-Soul the greatest based off mixtapes. Also, Illmatic spawned the "have multiple producers on one album" trend, which makes everything sound sporadic and barely put together.

Obviously he's made more than one good album, but Illmatic in terms of production was his best. Having more than one producer diversifies the sound of the music.

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Watch the Throne was good for what it was: a braggadacio album. Even then, the production on it was pretty amazing (ie The Joy). And you're ignoring the fact that just before WTT, Kanye put out possibly the best rap album since Jay Z started running New York. As far as Cruel Summer, group collaborations usually tend to fall short due to the range the group spans. It was good at giving CyHi the Prynce mainstream exposure, and "Sin City" even had Malik on it, giving him his first exposure to a really wide audience since "Would You Like to Ride?". Hit-Boy also had amazing co-production on "Higher". I don't see how you can call Pusha T's lyrics weak given he laid down a triple or quadruple entendre in "New God Flow". Overall, I'd say you aren't paying too much attention to the music and probably don't like Kanye, because your analysis is pretty off. You can say you don't like the artists, but you gave the wrong reasons. Also, 2 Chainz isn't signed, since now with digital sales you can get by without a deal.

I am just not impressed with what Kanye has produced. The only time I remember where I actually liked one of his verses was in Run This Town, but that's it. I mean, Watch the Throne would've been a great album if Yeezy wasn't part of it and centered Jay-Z. I just can't stand his Chipmunk Voice, weak lyrics, rapping while wearing a skirt (that's fact, Im not using a metaphor how whack he is), and same, boring flow. I know 2Chainz isn't signed, but he is part of the G.O.O.D family and has received support by G.O.O.D Music to produce T.R.U. Story and its music videos. And just because Pusha killed it in one track, doesn't mean he goes hard. He needs to do that simultaneously. I admit Cruel Summer did catch various underground rappers in the eyes of the public, but that does not change my opinion about the quality it has put out. Check out The Re-Up Album by Shady Aftermath, if they could put up an awesome album starring 5 plus artists, so can G.O.O.D., but sadly, they dont have the same talent Shady Aftermath has.

Nas is the greatest of all time. Lock post, end of discussion.

I believe it falls between Eminem or 2Pac as the greatest emcee of all time, but Nas is one of my top ten though. And you, sir, clearly do not listen to Nas very often, do you? Nas has several songs that inspires the next generation to reach for their dreams (although I expect to work under the field of politics); just because he is one of the best rappers, that does not mean others should not try.

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I am just not impressed with what Kanye has produced. The only time I remember where I actually liked one of his verses was in Run This Town, but that's it. I mean, Watch the Throne would've been a great album if Yeezy wasn't part of it and centered Jay-Z. I just can't stand his Chipmunk Voice, weak lyrics, rapping while wearing a skirt (that's fact, Im not using a metaphor how whack he is), and same, boring flow. I know 2Chainz isn't signed, but he is part of the G.O.O.D family and has received support by G.O.O.D Music to produce T.R.U. Story and its music videos. And just because Pusha killed it in one track, doesn't mean he goes hard. He needs to do that simultaneously. I admit Cruel Summer did catch various underground rappers in the eyes of the public, but that does not change my opinion about the quality it has put out. Check out The Re-Up Album by Shady Aftermath, if they could put up an awesome album starring 5 plus artists, so can G.O.O.D., but sadly, they dont have the same talent Shady Aftermath has.

You can not like Kanye, that's fine. I just disagree with your assessment. Watch the Throne would've been entirely different production-wise (and Jay Z rarely brings his best work out without Kanye on a track, exemption being "Hate" off Blueprint 3). And Pusha did good on most tracks, New God Flow is just an example of his best work. Did you listen to his Fear of God 2 mixtape? It bumps, and he almost makes drug dealing sound pretty scary instead of glorifying it. He's kinda like a less ADHD Meek Mill. The faces he makes in the booth are pretty ridiculous though if you watch some of the GOOD freestyles with Funk Flex. Another good thing about Cruel Summer is that it got Creepers out of Cudi's dungeon.
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You can not like Kanye, that's fine. I just disagree with your assessment. Watch the Throne would've been entirely different production-wise (and Jay Z rarely brings his best work out without Kanye on a track, exemption being "Hate" off Blueprint 3). And Pusha did good on most tracks, New God Flow is just an example of his best work. Did you listen to his Fear of God 2 mixtape? It bumps, and he almost makes drug dealing sound pretty scary instead of glorifying it. He's kinda like a less ADHD Meek Mill. The faces he makes in the booth are pretty ridiculous though if you watch some of the GOOD freestyles with Funk Flex. Another good thing about Cruel Summer is that it got Creepers out of Cudi's dungeon.

Jay-Z was one of the best emcees back in the day before he met Yeezy with the Black Album and Blueprints 1 and 2 being the best album Hov has produced.

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Jay-Z was one of the best emcees back in the day before he met Yeezy with the Black Album and Blueprints 1 and 2 being the best album Hov has produced.

Ye was working with Jay before Black Album. He actually produced "Takeover" which you probably know was Jay Z's best song to come up out of his beef with Nas. He also produced "Encore" and "Lucifer" off Blueprint 2.
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Ye was working with Jay before Black Album. He actually produced "Takeover" which you probably know was Jay Z's best song to come up out of his beef with Nas. He also produced "Encore" and "Lucifer" off Blueprint 2.

Yeezy might be a great producer, but my beliefs are different about his skills as a rapper and that is what my diss against him and his label was directed towards. You can have an awesome beat with a catchy chorus, but if there is no intelligence nor strategy approached in the lyricism, then I will not like the track (i.e !@#$%* in Paris, Snapbacks and Tattoos, Headlines). What I am trying to change in the rap game, is all the dullness and the overuse of slanguage. If you just rap as if you never went to school nor had an education, it will be really ironic calling your rhymes poetry (which is what every rapper calls their raps).

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I believe it falls between Eminem or 2Pac as the greatest emcee of all time, but Nas is one of my top ten though. And you, sir, clearly do not listen to Nas very often, do you? Nas has several songs that inspires the next generation to reach for their dreams (although I expect to work under the field of politics); just because he is one of the best rappers, that does not mean others should not try.

Top 3:

1. 2Pac

2. Nas

3. Eminem

So, we basically have the same opinion on who the GOAT is. With that being said, I meant what I said as a joke. Of course there are other good rappers out there, but there are very few people in the mainstream right now who can touch those three people.

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Yeezy might be a great producer, but my beliefs are different about his skills as a rapper and that is what my diss against him and his label was directed towards. You can have an awesome beat with a catchy chorus, but if there is no intelligence nor strategy approached in the lyricism, then I will not like the track (i.e !@#$%* in Paris, Snapbacks and Tattoos, Headlines). What I am trying to change in the rap game, is all the dullness and the overuse of slanguage. If you just rap as if you never went to school nor had an education, it will be really ironic calling your rhymes poetry (which is what every rapper calls their raps).

But 'Ye has the potential to make very good songs as well. He chooses to make what appeals to him and him alone, which is why we see him go on weird ass rants mid-song sometimes. He's also made some poetry-like songs, such as The Joy, Hey Mama, All Falls Down, etc. His other songs like !@#$%* in Paris are better when experienced at a party scene. In all, let's just give thanks for him not being Lil Wayne.

My top 5 in the game (based on the last three years, not historically): Wale, Nas, Ab-Soul, Kendrick Lamar, Lil B (he's possibly the greatest use of sarcasm since Machiavelli)

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Wait. Why are you posting these lyrics here? Why are you posting sound-based music on a forum about some online game when you just you could just as easily post them on say, YOUTUBE, the place this kind of stuff is actually meant to go?

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Wait. Why are you posting these lyrics here? Why are you posting sound-based music on a forum about some online game when you just you could just as easily post them on say, YOUTUBE, the place this kind of stuff is actually meant to go?

That is because maybe I do not have the proper sound equipment to astound the audience and am still underage to participate in America's labor force since I do not want my parents wasting money on such hobby that I may or may not lose interest?

And if you do not know, this is a blog, not a thread in the forums. If what you say is true, then I believe the Water Cooler (aka, the Spam/Game-OOC Forums) and our usage of IRC is uncalled for. Diversity brings interest in the community, Darkstorm, it does not bring pointlessness as your accusing of this blog (and many others) being.

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